The Little Poem that Couldn't... then Drove its Creator Insane

This poem is a horrible fucking mess. I see merit in cannibalizing lines 8-14, which seem to be anything of merit. The problem is there are two poems going on in here and I can't make them converge. The words won't come right and I can't get rid of the ideas already surrounding the better section; I delete them and they come right back. This poem is cursed. Anyway, if I can get the two ideas to properly converge, I think it would make a fantastic inside/outside sort of poem. The outside being the simple, probably universal idea of standing at a door in a rainstorm and knowing that because you don't have the luxury of enough time to wait it out, you'll have to go out in it, get wet, be uncomfortable the rest of the day... ew. The inside aspect of the poem would be any variety of intimate experience between two people... sexual, intellectual, emotional... whatever... that can not be carried forth in the day to day lives of these two people; an experience that must happen only once, be lingered over by them, then packed up as a memory, never to be spoken of or called upon again. The convergent factor is in the water; it's in the fluidity of human nature, and both the cleansing and sensual natures of rain. I can't say why I thought these two ideas belonged together in the first place, other than I was about two-thirds deep into a bottle of champagne in a Lawrence bar at the time I wrote the skeleton of it... which I've barely even managed a change to. Maybe it's not cursed so much as it's just drunken ramblings. I'm not ready to give this one up, though. Maybe if I take the section I like, completely remove it from the rest of the words... put it into its own document and only look at it as existing only unto itself... maybe I can salvage both inside and outside aspects with entirely new structure and words, just sucking the essence out of what's already there.

and if i can edit javascript on here, then i think i can actually put it up for a bit without google caching the words or photo.